Today we did an experiment. We had to feel a can of shaving cream. Then we had to spray out the cream as our feeling. After spraying we had to feel it again. We are to write a personified summary.
At first I felt heavy, cold, lonely. I felt like crying. I really wanted to express my feelings. I felt really sad. I was picked up and thrown. But then Something changed.
I slowly felt myself light, warm, accompanied. I cried and cried and got those feelings out. I was feeling okay. I expressed my feelings finally.
Now I feel very happy, loved and even more warm. I felt as happy as I could be in my whole life. Now I'm finally put down forever. R.I.P.
Well my experience was express your feelings never keep it in.
Wednesday 12 September 2018
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Hi Wajihah, I like your Narrative writing on the can. I like how you explained what you did before showing your writing, I wrote something like this too, my story went a little deep but there was a happy ending. If you were asked to carry the story on what would you write next?
ReplyDeleteHi Wajihah! I really enjoyed reading your personification writing. You really took on the task well and created some lovely statements. My only suggestion for now is to check on the capital S on something in the middle of one of your sentences.
ReplyDeleteReally well done!
- Miss Birtch